Review number # 9 of week 4/28-5/4

Hi Jessica,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: A Sports Trip to Remember

First Impression: I was nervous for you initially having the bus driver indicating you were from the same area. It isn't always a good thing to give out personal information. I am glad your case it worked out so well.

What I liked: I enjoyed how your story unfolded, it felt like I was going on the adventure with you step by step.

What needs your attention: Nothing, I did not note any grammar or punctuation errors that distracted me as I read. Nor did I actively seek to edit your story I read it for sheer enjoyment.

Favorite Parts: The Milwaukee Brewery sounded similar to the one in Merrimack, New Hampshire that I went with my first husband on our honeymoon. There was a movie and lots of sampling of different beer flavors. It sounds to me like Dave and Rich sampled a few. I am like you not a beer fan at all.

Overall Impression: This was an engaging read, thank you for sharing your adventure. I am happy you had the opportunity to make new friends.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .