Review number # 10 of week 4/28-5/4

Hi Flamebreather

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Finding a New Home

First Impression: What an adventure your grandfather had to reach his new destination. That was really scary times.

What I liked: I felt as if I was right there with him seeing the horrors on the road, you did an excellent job explaining what he saw and felt.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the grammar and punctuation are correct and the each paragraph contributes to the next smoothly.

Favorite Parts: I enjoyed learning about the different locations and why they chose to move on. Religion appears to be important to your family and their beliefs guided them wisely.

Overall Impression: I cannot imagine what it was like walking during those difficult times, your grandfather was truly blessed to have traveled without harm on that long journey. I am in awe of him.
Thank you for sharing his journey, I enjoyed reading about him.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .