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Hello there, David O'Haolin Whalen
This is a Simply Positive Review! *Nail*

*Paperdoll* You know, I'm not a huge fan of most rhyming poetry, because so many of them have become a sort of sing-song type of poetry, in order to get that rhyming word in. Yet, this is one of the rhyming poems that I really enjoyed to read.

*Hammer* The rhythm was mostly on time, the rhyme met its proper place at the end of the line, with its rhyming line above it, without the use of common, or overused catch-all rhyming words that make a reader's eyes bleed. Perhaps a line or two that seemed out of sync, length wise is all I could find, like the one below.

Observation:

"Will God shrug and look away" & its rhyming line: "…Only Fate can say…"
I think the last line is shorter, thus throwing the rhythm off a tiny bit. Perhaps one more word would ease the pause, for the reader.


Otherwise, well done! *Wolf*

Until next time--write on!

Regards,
WebWitch




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