This creepy peice popped up on the random read! Wow! You created a very dastardly creepy character and your descriptions are vivid and realistic. I like you unfold the wicked surprises he brings for the party and the interplay with the people is excellent. I could totally imagine the tone and look and would not want to be around. I am not fond of clowns and costumes anyway as they hide things! LOL

Your set up for the character was interesting too--from the Mental home and the voice that seems to lead! I like how you gave him a bit of care for the unloved girl though it never really seems kind.

The plot and details are coherent and the dialogue was natural and added to the drama.

The magic coat to escape was a surprise and one wonders if the whole thing happens inside his head. The last paragraph adds to the mystery and one can see the cycle begins again.

This story is well written and easy to follow. It really kept my attention even while it has a creepy and horrible them and ending. Well done!

You responded to this review 05/12/2016 @ 1:40am EDT

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