Review number # 6 of week May 5-11th

Hi Christopher,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Wendy like to be spanked

First Impression: As I was looking for the other piece I am to review as part of my judging roll in the Quills, I was sidetracked with Wendy. I connected immediately with her desire to be spanked, it is enjoyable foreplay in my opinion.

What I liked: How you shared Wendy's experience from the natural curiosity to the risks involved when boundaries are not kept. Yes, things can quickly go from safe to deadly. The reader was glad to read she was able to escape the situation before it escalated to that point.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the grammar and punctuation are correct. I found it unusual to see it written in couplets but it worked well here and reminded the reader it was about a couple, the actions of two adults.

Favorite Parts: The comprises of life with children in the home and adapting to the circumstances whenever possible. That is true about most sexual activities once you have children until they become adults. Planning is key to any adult activity.

Overall Impression: I enjoyed reading this and was reminded of a pleasurable activity that has fallen to the wayside.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .