Review number # 7 of week May 5-11th

Hi Christopher

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Drugs, Executions & Everything Else

First Impression: The combination of drugs and executions works, my curiosity was peaked.

What I liked: The paragraph about corruption stuck with me as I continued to read. It is true corruption has friends in all the right places and convincing people to let go of their power to do the right thing is nearly impossible. The drug of power is equally as dangerous as the drugs consumed, both flame desires to have more.

What needs your attention: Nothing, the grammar and punctuation appear correct, the reader was not distracted while she read. Equivalency might be used instead of equivalencing, Microsoft keeps jumping all over the usage.

Favorite Parts:“‘Equality’ has been turned into ‘creative’ equivalencing for handy importuners. There is definitely exploitation in all walks of life when faced with balancing equality. At our age, yes I did look at your profile picture, we've seen equality issues frequently in our life span and they are all subject to interpretation.

Overall Impression: This was an engaging read with some very interesting points to consider. It is clear to this reader you invested time in researching the topic and compiled your thoughts before writing a thought provoking essay to raise awareness.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




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