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 Review #4220640 |
 hiya Josh! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you and this popped up on Random Reads!  The title is intriguing and draws attention and I wonder about things that tempt!  The tag line clues me in to the theme and I like the idea of Education as a genre-not sure if your target audience might be drawn to that genre though.  The message is potent and so relevant for our time. If only folks would learn by watching and listening to those who have been there, but alas, some need the real experience themselves. The free style way you unfold the experience even looks like a descent on the page and including the final END at a young age is emphatic and a dramatic way to make a point. The truth is it happens all the time. Your short lines are easy to read and the message becomes clear as it is not hidden in long phrasings and wisdoms. The facts are vivid and tell the tale.  I noticed a typo in "dom't take ..." near the end. The rating is appropriate as well. Thanks. The loud voice in caps, as if from the grave is so cool and abrupt! It gets attention. Powerful message that can inspire and encourage teens to just say NO! It can show those who may just be so naive---the results that can occur. And for those who may want to say no...but worry about peers---the death threat might get that point across. Good show! Thanks for sharing your vision.!  Light on the path as you write on! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!"  .
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