Introduction- Your little joke made me laugh, but I
already told you that. lol
I did like the 'enjoy the memories with me'.
Very nicely pulling the reader in.

Although not in the introduction, I did like the
'share the faith'.

Tree-usually the house is built before the fence.
Too hard to get in construction
and crew. The pouring of the concrete alone takes up a
lot of room with the cement mixer let alone the workers.

In one sentence you mention family, the squirrels. Then
family, human. You may want to differentiate at the very
beginning of the sentence. 'The house had different...'

--Families moved in and out of the little house.

A squirrel family lived in the tree and played in
the yard.---We already know there is a family in the
tree.


The squirrel watched the new family: an old lady, a
young woman and a little girl. Lots of other children
were there, too. They didn't live there but came and
stayed for hours and sometimes for days on end.---You
may want to make this a bit more detailed. I got a
bit lost. Is it a foster home? (lots of children were
there) all at the same time? That line was confusing.

Days on end, also confusing, family visiting, foster
kids??

he did was made a mad dash --make a mad dash-there are a few other typos. Might want to



Also, you have 'he and he and he' confusing dog and
squirrel.

Again, quizzically eyeing the new black and tan member
of the family. who eyed the dog? The squirrel?
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I'm not sure if there was enough to really understand
the campfire when it's a single person.
But I think I got it. When you invited us to listen that
was cool, so it works.

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I can't do more at this time. the sides keep chopping
off. So I don't know where the sentences begin and end. I'm
sorry.
If you want more, let me know where I left off and
I can continue. The spots to fix are little, but the
story is good

Love, LinnAnn

now words and sentences are jumping around or disappearing.
Even down below in preview my post, the left side is totally
chopped off.