Hello there HuntersMoon!

I just love poetry and I clicked on the "Read and review" link and got sent to your page randomly. I like how you included the note about the rhyme scheme at the end of it to explain the Sonnet. I haven't come across a Kyrielle Sonnet before and I gotta say i really like it and I like the repeated lines... it's really great to read.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
I don't have any corrections for you poem. Your rhyming, the scheme, was spot on.

Rhythm/Rhyming
The thing about rhyming poetry is I think it's more difficult than say... non-rhyming. You have to follow a scheme and I think one of the hardest things is rhyming but not forcing it. There's some rhyming poems I've come across where I go yes... you rhymed with that word only because it rhymes. That is not the case with your poem and the rhyming isn't forced at all and serves your poem.

My Favorite Line(s)
Rembering your fragrant skin
I’m trapped by images within,
ensnaring me with redolence.
My days are filled with your incense-

I really do like these lines above in particular.

Things Which I Enjoyed
I really enjoyed the imagery of your poem and coming across this style of Sonnet. It has a really pretty sound to it when you read out loud and there's this sensual energy to it that I kind of got from it as well. Maybe that's just me reading into it more but it just seemed kind of sensual with the descriptions and imagery.

Overall Comments
Overall, I found this to be a great poem that I'm glad that I got randomly sent to it. It just has this lulling, almost erotic edge to it that just really resonates with the visuals in it. It's impressive that you made this with a prompt that the words used like rose, and return and you made this great piece from that prompt with the words. So, not only is your rhyming not forced, your prompt words fit perfectly with this piece. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



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