Hello LacyLashes . Welcome to WDC! I'm Charlie. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope this review finds you well.


Title/General Thoughts/Subject Matter: I like these poems that create pictures. I think they're really cool and they add so much to the theme. When I open it up, I'm immediately thinking of the image of a chair, which helps me get into the mood for reading about a chair. I've never written a concrete poem, except in school, so it might be something I should explore more!


What Worked: I think you did a good job with forming the shape using your words. I also thought some of the phrasing you used was clever in its own right. My favorite part was the lines that formed the actual seat of the image:

When there is no chair to sit upon,
Where in the world to craft wit upon?

I thought this was sort of a clever way of wording things, quick-witted, even. You must have been sitting in a chair for this part! I also liked the sort of 'puns' that you used, like cushioning the mind. There were a lot of things that had to do with chairs but were used in a different way. Really interesting technique!


Technical Issues/Suggestions: There is a typo in this line:

It is not the mind the requires cushion,
It should be 'that' instead of 'the' in the middle there. I'm not sure if this edit will mess with the shape, but it's only one extra letter, so I'm leaning toward no.

I thought the last line on the front leg of the chair was just a tad too long, but then again, if it's all perfectly symmetrical, it's just going to look like a lowercase 'h', no bueno! Probably best left as is.


Final Thoughts: Overall, I thought this was an interesting poem with a cool image. Thanks again for sharing!


Best wishes,





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .