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 Got Milk?  [13+]
Billy fixes cereal for father's day, but he needs milk.
by nomlet
Review of Got Milk?  
Review by Mina~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello! nomlet

I just read this dialogue based piece from read and review page.

I like the delightful conversation between two characters Billy and his father. Billy fixes cereal for father's day, but he needs milk.
I want to thank you for your sweet conversation, which made me smile.

The dialogue flows wonderfully and kept me reading to the end. I learned that well-written dialogue upticks the plot and gives the reader new data about the characters.

Suggestion: you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be more interesting.

I enjoyed reading this piece. These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.

Happy Writing!

Mina  


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