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I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
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*BoxCheckR* I really enjoyed the magical wild west, fantasy story that kept me entertained and wondering what would happen next.

*SuitClub* The use of the colloquial language brought the character to life. (Although it can slow a reader down, to make sure she got what he was saying,) He is a likeable guy and the reader cares about his well-being, in the story.

*Web2* He tells a fine tale, as the narrator, and weaves the scenes from the wild west reality to the Faerie land of fantasy.

*Fairy3* Quite a bold move melding these two genre-types together, A Western rancher/cowpoke, so very McMurtry, "old west," and the fantastic world of unicorns and fairies. Interesting!


Fun Observation:

But I heard more. Whispers ‘bout folk who jus’ walked in an’ out of Faerie. Who brought back magics. Weren’t just talk, neither. I saw this one woman, blind ol’ bat, get her sight back. ‘Nother time – I swear t’ ya – I saw a feller’s hand, what he’d just chopped off when th’ axe slipped, grown back, fire-new.

"Back Magic" *Laugh* I really like this paragraph, whether intentional or not. The magic that brought back sight, a hand... And they "brought back magics." As in bring back the magical item. I like the double entendre, here. *Bigsmile*

Other Observations:

*MugW* I'm sure there are spots that needed a tune-up here and there, a slight slip of the colloquial language mixed with an unexpected word from this character. It was just a sense of -- he wouldn't say that, then. That's a difficult one to call when there is so much colloquial language throughout to work through.

*CowboyHat* This was a clever story to pull off, and dang entertaining! Your complex writing job, yielded the simplicity of this likeable character. And that's a very good thing!

Well done! *Tackg*


Good luck with the contest, and again, thanks for entering! *Delight*

Regards,
Web~Witch

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