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| Hello there!  I am reviewing your story as a judge for the
Thanks for entering! Hello, Caroline Your story held my attention, pulled me into the protagonist's head and made me see life through her eyes. And I'm not usually a fantasy genre fan, but I like to leave my comfort zone and read and review many different genres.  I love that it wasn't so much a battle with swords for power in some kingdom, but rather, a battle of wits and reason. I liked Natasha, she presented as a strong woman who was placed in field positions that were much lower than her gifts should have allowed for her. She was thought of as less important to their tribe. They just didn't believe in her powers. I found them quite interesting, myself.  Careful attention was paid to the writing, grammar, and I noticed English-English, spelling on a couple words. They used to take me by surprise several years ago, when I was a Newbie. I thought they were misspellings.  Loved this part:"Estac had gifted Natasha with a similar power to Nathan’s, but far less powerful. She could death-speak with animals only, which nobody viewed as useful."  I liked that she could communicate with dead animals, and see their memories, the places they've been, the things they saw, through their own eyes. Nice way to lift the level of fantasy. Your story followed the fantasy prompt handily and did not need to take it to a bloody battle for the release of Nathan. She found a new and better life for both herself and Nathan, where both would fit-in well and be appreciated. Much nicer tribe of people, too!  I enjoyed the ending very much. It was quite satisfying!Excellent job in writing and entertaining the reader!  Until next time--write on! Regards, WebWitch Good luck with the contest, and again, thanks for entering!  Regards, Web~Witch
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