Hello WW!
I'm one of your White Walker foot soldiers just checking out your camp. I am representing simply positive reviewing group today for this review of mine. I wanted to read and review your piece because I'm not sure if I have been able to visit your port yet to raid around.

Below is my review of your item beginning with Corrections:

Corrections/Suggestions
I don't have any suggestions! The rhyming and rhythm is on point with maybe a word or two I might play with like taking out 'But' in the second to last stanza but that's just a little tinker.

Things Which I Enjoyed
It's that empty tequila monster under my bed!

I really enjoyed this part and kind of chuckled to myself that all of the terror was caused by the Tequila monster... I've totally had that monster go after me before so it is a formidable foe. I like how you rhyme well with this and it doesn't feel forced as you keep up with that and the rhythm. Also, this was just one of those fun little ones to read that you crack a grin at the fun of this poem.

Also, I love that you went to refill your glass even after all that terror it caused.

Overall Comments
Overall, this is a fun, catchy poem about Halloween and all the things that go bump in the night and in your imagination. Only this time all those bumps and creeping, crawling things going around was actually caused by a Tequila haze is just... great fun. I hope this little review of mine brightened your day before our great journey into the GOT craziness. Thank you for sharing and keep on writing! =D



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .