Guilt dug it's its dagger If possessive, no apostrophe.

She walked passed past him and grabbed Maia's arm Passed is a verb. Since walked is the verb of the sentence, the adjective past is needed to describe the place she walked to (past him).

Ivy opened her handbag(,) and grabbed her Unnecessary comma.

but he decided she was only saw the same old Ivy I liked this suggestion that Winnie made for this sentence. I added only to it for emphasis.

she looked a few inches taller than the five feet five she was There's a few ways to play with this sentence:

         she looked a few inches taller than the five feet five of her high school days

         she looked a few inches taller than the five feet five he remembered

         she looked a few inches taller than she did in high school

         she looked a few inches taller in her high heels (Turns out she's wearing small heels)

I should mention that girls, in general, reach their adult height sooner than guys and don't grow much more from high school to adulthood (though there are exceptions to everything in life). The first time I read this phrase I thought that it meant that she seemed taller at that moment in a conceived-grandeur way (not really comparing to her actual past height), so it's up to you where you want this sentence to go. Some clarification might help take out that 'was' naturally, or you might choose to take out this phrase entirely.

"So, you enjoyed your affair while working?" Not an error, but does everyone in town know about this affair? It's the only reason I can think of why Carl would know anything about it. (Question answered. )

and toss her soot[-]like hair or I don't think this is a fixed rule, but many adjectives before the noun that are multiple words with a single idea have a hyphen to make them a compound word, and I personally prefer that.

She walked pass past him Same deal as before.

"I . . . I think I saw her searching. Maybe she was looking for you," Sebastian lied. I have ranted in the past about supposed "synonyms for said" and the crazy dialogue tags people come up with, but lied is one of those rare exceptions I really like.

"Yeah[,] but(,) I want to go home now." or "Yeah[,] but(,)[...] I want to go home now." I'm not sure if you want a pause after but or not, but either way there needs a correction.

and remind her that she was the life of the party ten years ago I don't think this is incorrect or bad since this is basically his thought dialogue, but we can play with this anyway...

         and remind her that she sparkled as the life of the party ten years ago

         and remind her that she brought life to every party ten years ago

...and so on. I wouldn't worry too much about it. Also notice that I didn't fuss with the dialogue. When it comes to verbs like these, I think you should decide how your characters speak. Like I said, listen to how people talk. Making your characters sound like real people is what's most important.

he embraced and said Bye bye I would actually go with 'goodbye' for this since it's in narrative. Otherwise just make the capitalization consistent if you want to keep it.

She was smiling when she alighted his car. This is fine since the was smiling is demonstrating a continuous past action. Otherwise you can word it like this:

         She smiled as she alighted his car.

That was when they begun began dating, Began is the past tense. Begun is the past participle and is used when a linking verb is involved ("The race had begun").

"What if the reunion gave her he the confidence to Typo.

the way the boquet bouquet of roses fell Misspelling.

It was Maia. After texting each other, she figured that Maia was still at the party. I think the first sentence is fine as is. The next sentence could be clearer and use more showing (I think they texted each other there, or maybe Ivy simply answered). Something like this might be clearer:

         It was Mia. Ivy answered the text, telling her that she went home. Mia must still be at the party, Ivy figured.

         She wondered why Sebastian told...

She didn't understand what caused her to crush Sebastian ten years ago. I know you didn't care for this sentence, either. I noticed that the following sentence stated that questions ate her up. Maybe we can cut out some of those "to be" verbs by giving her questions:



She didn't know whether it was sympathy or regret or long lost love taking the form of this pain. Here's another sentence you asked for suggestions on. I actually think you can cut this sentence out entirely. The reader can try to infer what could be causing her pain, especially since she doesn't know herself:



I changed some wording to make her sound more irritated, just subjective suggestions.

"I know its it's been so[,] so long." Contraction "it's" needs an apostrophe. The two "so"s also act as coordinate adjectives and need a comma.

"I agree with Maia. I know it's one a.m in the morning but we're not I would have to look up how to write time in prose, but I think this wording sounds more like how people speak anyway.

Then Maia begun began asking a few questions No linking verb, so it must be began.

For a second he wondered whether their words would be enough to could fill their short journey. I think just simplifying this sentence works.

"You tell me, Ivy(,) how did you spend yours ten years after high school?" We can get rid of the "to be" verb, the typo, and the comma splice:

         "Tell me, Ivy, how you spent your ten years after high school."

He heard taking Ivy took in a deep breath. "I moved to North Carolina If Ivy is the one speaking here, she needs to be the subject of the action beat before the dialogue.

so I wasted an a year "Y", in this case, makes a consonant sound ("yee") so the article should be A.

"I them then moved here and Typo.

An A year ago Same here.

I wanted to avenge (revenge, punish) you because Avenge isn't quite right here; you "avenge" a person who was wronged or the action itself ("I'll avenge my murdered brother!" "Sebastian wanted to avenge his broken heart"). Revenge, which can be a noun or verb, is done against the person who done the wrong ("Sebastian wanted to revenge Ivy, but he changed his mind").

I wish he didn't plan to avenge (revenge, some other synonym) me Same here.

In there, he apologized and begged for the same thing that happened years ago, not to happen again. . .He went on and mentioned that he didn't show up because he suspected that she was angry at him. He apologized again and ended saying that he loved her. There's quite a bit of telling of his letter. You threw in a few lines (which I didn't paste in here) but I think instead of the telling, you could add a few more short lines in lieu of the description and show the letter instead.