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 The Lonely Tower  [E]
Betrayal is a bitter pill
by Chris24
Review of The Lonely Tower  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

From the first sentence! This 300 word story was compelling from the beginning! I love that the Queen was surveying her land. It sets the tone for her to be strategic and cunning in a world where those virtues will be handy to have I'm sure.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

Yes, but I would love for you to elaborate your story. What happens next? You have your characters developing into intriguing story figures and you are setting your plot up to be highly engaging.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

Yes, the Queen wants her land back of course. We will see if it's true love with Edmund or is she just using him to get back her power? I definitely want to stay tuned!


*StarStruck* Glows:

This is an extremely well written piece for three hundred words. It has interesting characters and a compelling story line. I want to see what happens next and don't want to be left on a hook. You set the scene vividly with great description. It was cold, lonely and lofty.



*Vine1* Grows:

It's too short. I want to see how this story develops! I'm hooked! Is she a benevolent queen or evil and controlling? Is she going to be a queen of the people and instill peace and prosperity or rule by her fist and sword?



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