Title of Work: : The Old Rocking Chair
Author of Work: : JMariah
Date: : July 6

Plot:
A young girl sits in an old rocking chair and remembers the past.

Scene/Setting:
Lizbeth sits on the porch of her family home and rocks in a chair which has been in the family a very long time. She thinks about her grandmother, who has been dead now for two years. The woman had always given her sage advice. Lizbeth, named after her Grandmother, had inherited the rocking chair from the woman. Lizbeth, thinks about how her father left when times had gotten hard for the family. She remembers how her mother told her not to be mad at him for leaving.

Lizbeth had been told by her grandmother, on the grandmother's deathbed, not to cry for her. The piece ends with one tear falling down Lizbeth's face but we are told the tear is for herself.

Characters:
Lizbeth - twelve years old
Grandmother (in thought)
Mother (in thought)
Father (in thought)

Suggestions:
I love the line, “It’s not easy for a man to lower his pride.” My father always stuck around but it had been hard on him also. This line really hit home. With the grandmother gone and Lizbeth's mother "not right", Lizbeth has had to grow up quick. You demonstrate this well with the last line of the piece.

The piece was very well written. I could feel Lizbeth's sorrow. I could feel how tired the twelve year old felt, thinking about the future.


Character Count: 1,236 (tags = 222 Characters)
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