Hi P. A. Matthews/E. A. Irwin ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a very sad story, dear author. It speaks of love, and loss, and hardship.

True love never dies. When two people truly love the other, are faithful to the other, respect the other, nothing can come between that. Not even the worst that life can throw at them. This story reflects that.

Suggestions:

I do have a couple of suggestions, dear author. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Paragraph 5:

I think "striped" should be "stripped", perhaps?

Paragraph 8:

I think that "renting" should be "rending".



Characters:

We do not know the names of the characters. I'm guessing that that was done on purpose. Homeless people are too often seen as nameless, faceless, insignificant. They are not, of course. They are people like us, who have the same needs as us, who love like us. They are people like us who've had bad things happen to them, and that could happen to anyone. It's a tragedy that that is not blatantly obvious to some. But then, if they are seen as somehow different, it may be easier to ignore them.

Storyline

This is a sad tale about a couple who has fallen on bad times. Regardless of those bad times, they stick together, and love the other as much as they ever have.

It's well written, and packs a punch.

Wording:

I found the wording to be very suited to the item.

Presentation:

A nice, clean layout that is easy on the eye, and I thank you for that!



My Rating:

This is a good story, dear author, with an important message. I am glad that I got to read it.

I did have a couple of suggestions, but nothing major, just typos. I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .