Hi P. A. Matthews/E. A. Irwin ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is an interesting poem, dear author. Sad, yet hopeful. Bittersweet, perhaps?

I had not happened upon the Etheree poetry form before, but I like it. You have certainly used it to great effect here. The message suits the form.

For a short piece, it packs a punch. It made me think. As with another item I just read and reviewed in your portfolio, it tells the reader that the mortal life is just one step. Love lasts beyond death. Death is just a gateway to something else, so there is no need to cry when someone passes on. Of course, that is easier said than done.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. I had no problem picking up on the rhythm and flow. It is also nicely presented.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion. I like your use of punctuation, as it aids the overall clarity of the item, and makes it easy to pick up on the poem's rhythm. I would, then, allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. So, I would start the eight line with "Displeasure" rather than "displeasure".

My Rating:

This is a powerful poem. I am glad that I found it in your portfolio.

I only had one suggestion, and that was a matter of personal preference. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




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