Hi Eiji ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a poem about redemption. A change of direction. A way home. I liked it.

I love your use of imagery. The water, and the darkness of sin, contrasting with the star and the light of righteousness.

I think that this theme is one that many readers will recognise. We all find ourselves adrift at some point in our lives. I know that I have. When that happens, we need to find our own direction. Which direction we choose will have a lasting effect on our lives and, quite possibly, our souls.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow to it. Your language is clear, and the item itself is well-presented and pleasant on the eyes, which is always a bonus.

Suggestions:

I only have one suggestion, dear author. I like your use of punctuation. That aids the clarity of the poem, and helps the reader pick up on the intended rhythm and flow.

I would, then, allow the punctuation at the beginning of each line to depend on the individual sentences within the piece. That would perfect the overall clarity.

My Rating:

I liked this poem. It is powerful and carries a good message.

I did have one suggestion, but that was more a matter of personal preference. I will still give your item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .