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  |  | Fortunately/Unfortunately  [13+] Alternate optimistic/pessimistic posts  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"    HI deemac I am here with a review to celebrate you!   What a fascinating idea for an in and out event. I have read stories with this contrast and it can be quite fun.  Your introduction is short with a clear direction and it flows smoothly especially the flow of "rolling story"! Using the word "just" twice so close popped out at me and slowed me down. I would drop the second instance.  I like how you exemplify the idea by using the key words in your two paragraphs and I had to smile at the second one. A fun tone inviting creativity.  It is cool to provide an opportunity for many to use their creativity to respond to prior entries and present an opposite. It was fun to read. I remember Puffinstuff and the mix of common images like Polly's teapot, Grandfather clock, Dagnabbit, etc create quite he wild story line! Thanks for creating this comical creation!  Light on the path as you write on!! eyestar ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable **
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You responded to this review 07/14/2016 @ 5:51am EDT