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 Hasta La Vista  [13+]
Evicting an unwanted guest entry for the Writer's Cramp
by Whiskerfacebythefireplace
Review of Hasta La Vista  
Review by eyestar~*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Balloonp* Hey Whiskerface! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you! *Delight*


*Fairy* LOL! Oh this is priceless and you really surprised me with the twist at the end! Brilliant! *thuubsup*

You drew me into the ending of the relationship right from the key word prompt. The potency of the choice to say good bye is emphasized with the short blunt lines throughout the verses. Vocabulary was well chosen to suit the theme and the message was clear. After I read to near the end, I see now how some words were clues to what you were really taking about. (sickening, common, etc. I am a little slow!! LOL

Making it a dialogue added to its drama and began the awareness about who the guest was. *Wink* Refrain line was effective and enforced the demand!

The verses were balance with distinct rhythm and rhyme and it was fun to read it's strong tone! I could hear good old Arnold! *Laugh* Good use of prompt words!

Thanks for sharing your craftiness and vision! *Starstruck* Made my day! Hope the bug left!

Light on the path as you write on!
eyestar
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