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Review by Cadie Laine
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This was a good read. The rhythm flows through the poem easily. I like the cadence and word choices you used. It seemed you found a new perspective on the problem you had. Whether or not you found the answer to the riddle you had at least you weren't looking at it from the same direction.
There is one piece I would change. Take out the word 'And' in the 6th stanza. It links the two subject but just cuts off at method. If you take out 'and' to me it still makes sense. Either that you have an incomplete sentence. The word choice you used added a depth to the poem that made it nice to read. You chose your words wisely.
You reminded me that we can't look at things in life the same way all the time. We have to start from scratch and learn to change and grow in our lives in order to move forward.
You did move from a puzzle to a riddle. These items are very different things, I get what you are saying but you might look at maybe changing the riddle to a puzzle unless the situation in your life changed so much that it became something totally different.
Overall Great writing. I enjoyed it. Keep writing.
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