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the edge of the sea  [E]
why the ocean moves me
by christo
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, christo ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


*Castlegr* Why I chose to review this work: The reason I chose to read and review this particular poem was because of the short description. I could think of a number of reasons why someone would like ocean and be drawn to it, I thought of why I might be drawn to ocean as well but in the end, the reader was still left curious as to why the poet is drawn to it. To find that out, I am here reading it.

*Castleright* First Impression: You have a great skill with words and the reader finds exactly why you are drawn to the ocean and why it calls out to you. As the reader, I could, too, feel and relate to your perspective as you drew the picture in her mind. It made the reader feel calm and relaxed at the end.

*Castlegr* Imagery and Vocabulary: The vocabulary you had used in your poem wasn't the usual or common one but it enhanced the poem and the reader could get the idea. The vocabulary you had used was quite broad and vivid, painting very colourful images in the reader as well as conveying the emotions to the reader, making her feel nice, light and relaxed as she imagined herself walking in the sand near the ocean.

*Castleright* Favourite Lines: The second stanza was the one I liked the most because of the way it was worded and how you mentioned the main reason why it calls out to you. It actually made me imagine myself looking at the ocean and listening voices calling out to me as an invitation to go in.

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