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The Cookie Pushers  [13+]
A satirical poem about Girl Scout cookie sales.
by Whitemorn
Review by Bobbi
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hello, Whitemorn , and good afternoon!

It's battle time for House Tyrell again, and your name popped up on our list of warriors to "defeat" (via reviews *Smile*). This was an awesomely funny poem speaking of the devilishness of girl-scout fundraising confectioneries, so I will rate this poem with four and a half stars. Here are my policies for rating and reviewing: "Bobbi's Rating and/or Reviewing Policy" . If you have any questions about your rate or review, please feel free to email me.


A few things I noticed as a reader:

It is difficult to write comedy, so I hold anything that makes me laugh out loud on this site in high regard. *Rolling* I love the terminology you use in the title. I've read that high-sugar foods are addictive and require a reduction method to break the habit—methadone clinic, anyone? *Laugh*

I don't do a whole lot of punctuation corrections when it comes to poetry, so I'll leave you alone about the comma usage (I think it annoys people when I proofread, but I generally provide a dropnote with such suggestions for short stories to ignore at will). Otherwise, I didn't see any misspellings or other typos... All your WritingML tags are in order and your item looks clean.

So you enjoy those little demonic cookies of joy with moderation. My favorite happens to be Samoas ("Caramel Delights" once upon a time), and I could easily eat the whole box. If they come out with a gluten-free version someday, I'm doomed. *Shock*

Thank you for allowing me to review your piece. I'm just another reader and writer so use or discard any of my suggestions at your personal discretion. If you make changes and would like me to reassess your piece, feel free to e-mail me. *Mail*

Keep writing and carry on! *ThumbsUpL*

—Brandi of House Tyrell *Shield5*
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