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 | Cinder Klause  [13+] In Europe, you're sitting the storm out, stranded at train station? Write your adventure!  |
| (3.5)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Just tired  PLOT - Cinder and his friends approach a place where he believes he was born. An old man answers the door, tries to send them away, but Cinder is insistent. The man tells him to come back tomorrow at noon, and not to be late. They leave and head back to get a room for the night. Hail the size of baseballs begins to rain down on them as they run toward the train, desperate to get away. SETTING - Good visuals of the man at the door. It was easy to picture him. The hail scene was described well too. CHARACTERS - Cinder and his friends are orphans. They band together and look out for each other. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - The door swung open with force, drawing a chilly gust of wind off the street, through the four kids piled on the stoop and into the surly face at the door.--not sure where this was going Sherelle --earlier in the story you have Serelle--mocked her saying they were illegitimate offspring of fictional characters and famous dead people. The conversations with all of the added nicknames were a little confusing and hard to keep up with. THOUGHTS - This story left me with a lot of questions. What was the hail storm all about? Did it have anything to do with the house and the creepy guy that opened the door to them? What would be happening tomorrow when they ventured back? It is an interesting beginning.  
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