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 Gauntlet Day 2  [E]
This is my entry for the second day of the Character Gauntlet.
by ElizabethHayes-DaughterofIAM
Review of Gauntlet Day 2  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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PLOT -
Caitlin's parents are rich beyond belief, and what should make life easier for them, has the opposite effect. Instead of being able to enjoy their comfortable lifestyle, it's cause for constant fighting, that leaves their daughter running for an escape.

SETTING -
You had some good moments with Caitlin on the pier as she laid there. You gave enough insight into her parents fighting to catch of glimpse of what they are all about.

CHARACTERS -
Caitlin is confused, not able to make sense of her parents. The fighting sends her to the sanctuary of the water, just to try and escape their fighting. Her parents are consumed by wealth and status, even going so far as to burn her ordinary looking clothes, as if what she wears makes a negative statement about them.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE -
No errors here. Dialog worked well for this piece.

THOUGHTS -
There is one point where Caitlin is on the pier and meditating, and there is mention of a light near her. I'm not sure where you were going with this, and when it wasn't mentioned again, it made it difficult for me to understand what point you were trying to get across. I definitely felt bad for Caitlin. Having money doesn't necessarily bring about happiness. I know people like this, who make sure they name drop designer this and that. It's a sad way to live really, because they miss out on so many other things in this world. Write on!
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