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 |  | She Hunts  [18+] A vampire with succubus-like powers, chooses her unfortunate victim.  |
| (5.0)| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Gaby ~ Just tired  PLOT - Meridiana is on the prowl, in a bar, looking for the perfect man to satisfy her hunger and need. It isn't long before she catches the eye of Eric, who's just as excited as she is. They leave together, but never make it farther than the alleyway. SETTING - You have wonderful description. It was easy to get inside her head, know what she thought, felt, wanted and how she saw Eric. CHARACTERS - Meridiana is a vampire, attractive, and needs to feed. Her senses are heightened so much so that she can pick up on any little shift from her victim. Eric is filled with lust, looking for release and makes a play for Meridiana. GRAMMAR/SPELLING/DIALOGUE - Dialog fit well with the story. Meridiana even teases, though Eric misses it. No errors in the story. THOUGHTS - This story flowed so well, filled with a little passion and a lot of excitement. Your description of the encounter in the ally was filled with descriptive elements that quickly pulled me right into the scene. The smells of Eric, what he looked like, and most importantly what he tasted like to her were great. I liked that she wanted him, but also wanted to leave him with a smile on his face. She did that alright, before she took the rest of his lifeblood. Great job. Write on!   
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