Greetings, Jillian Whitney!

My name is Lady Cubbyella and I am one of the sly foxes from the House of Florent.

Title: Haunted

First Impression: In real life, I'm sure this happens more than what we are aware of... the battle, I mean, from within us. It's so unfortunate. You've done well in taking this reader through the narrator's thoughts and actions.

What needs your attention: Just a few minor things...
In the 6th line with red font, You, don’t love me, it's not necessary to have a comma since you are not addressing someone here.
Near the end of the poem, 4th line from the bottom... over its’ smooth features, its' does not require an apostrophe.

What part I liked best: I thought it was a great touch with the red font. It added more to the body of the poem and actually made it more interesting.

Overall impression: I felt you did a good job with. I read a lot of poetry involving this sort of issue. Nice work.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

Have a great day and...
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")

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