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 Oak  [E]
A short tale about nature
by John Nation
Review of Oak  
Review by Starling
In affiliation with Cross Timbers Groups  
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Title of Work: : Oak (Short Story/nature)
Author of Work: : John Nation
Date: : July 19

Plot:
A short tale about nature

Scene/Setting:
This tale tells about the birth of an Oak tree. It talks about how it finally breaks through the ground and how it's wall, the pod, break away and it can feel the warmth of the sun. The seedling tells us about seeing it's mother but not knowing which of the tall trees she is. It tells how it sees stars for the first time. It tells about its first experience with a lightning and thunderstorm. How it fears it, how it is almost washed away by the rain and water running around it. Another Oak falls and shields the seedling just in time. The seedling can not stay away any longer, so it sleeps.

When it wakes everything is green again. It tells how the cycle of sleep and being awake eventually allow it to grow. It feels alive with the families of animals which us it for homes. The now Mighty Oak, tells us how proud it feels being part of the forest like it cousins and children (other seedlings just beginning.)

Characters:
Oak Tree

Suggestions:
I really enjoyed this piece. You did an excellent job of using personification to tell us how the tree would be feeling. I have seen this done before of course in cartoons and other stories. I don't think I have ever read about how a tree would feel being born, and discovering the world.

Character Count: 1,217 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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