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What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

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What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* I think that Jackson hasn't even left yet and she's moved on and rightly feels a bit a guilt about it. Her backup guy is waiting in the wings.

This is a tale of romance and regret. I can see the regret lasting longer than the new romance.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

*Thumbsup* I like the fact that Jackson found out only because she couldn't hide her secret. I also like that the pearl is a lasting thing while a flower is fleeting and ephemeral in its beauty.

There are a lot a layers to this. I guess the argument could be made that Jackson's life doesn't really revolve around her, so why should hers revolve around him? Why shouldn't she move on eventually (maybe not this quickly), knowing he will be gone indefinitely.

He only goes so far in his caring and must do his duty, which comes first.

It is clear from your writing that she loves the pearl-giver the most and the other is merely a diversion that costs her in regret.

I wasn't totally sure, in the end, how the prompt line fit as a warning from the soldier. How does that tie in with the rose exactly? I understand that it is the trace of the rose that gives her away - more to herself than anyone else.

Very imaginative and creative story!

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

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