Hello Afras Yasin . How are you doing? Welcome to WDC! I'm Charlie. Thanks for sharing your writing with us. I hope this review finds you well.


Title/General Thoughts/Subject Matter: I guess you never can trick those sly foxes, huh? I like little parables like this because they're often clever and moral lessons are always important to learn! I think this one might be a little too dark for a child's story because of the tiger's fate in the end, but an important lesson all the same. I guess some of the childhood tales have been even darker than this though.


What Worked: I like the story told here. Sometimes we think we're being clever, but there's always someone more clever waiting to pounce. It was interesting too that the tiger got what was coming in the end. It was a very Darwinian kind of story where only the fittest survived. Even though the tiger had a good plan, it was foiled by his own lack of attention to detail with the footprints moving to the cave and never away. If he was very smart, he would have let some of the animals survive and bring back word of what a saint he was so that even more animals would have come near.


Technical Issues/Suggestions: I thought the wording at times was clunky. For example:

He began to keep on saying
This would be better stated as something like, "His mantra became:" and then continue with his life mantra.

- Foot prints should be one word.

Final Thoughts: Overall, I thought this was a cute story, although a bit sad because of the tiger's inability to get food in the end. I guess that's the way the food chain works though! I would only suggest working on the wording a bit in this story because it's rough at times. Thanks again for sharing!


Best wishes,





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .