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Title of Work: : The Black Sheep (Short Story, Contest Entry)
Author of Work: : Dream Justly - House Targaryen
Date: : July 22

Plot:
Based on the nursery rhyme "Baa, Baa, Black Sheep," for the Little Bite contest.

Scene/Setting:
Beran, a farmer, climbs a hill and bleats like a sheep. Another younger man comes up the hill and says he is the "Black Sheep" the man was calling for. It takes a bit of convincing, but eventually Beran believes him and hands the Black Sheep three bags of gold. The gold is payment for the Black Sheep to kill Beran's next door neighbor, the neighbor's wife and son, so he can buy the land the neighbor is refusing to sell. The Black Sheep thinks the bags of gold are a little light, but agrees to the deed.

The next morning Beran, wakes to a screem and knows the Black Sheep has completed his job. On the table next to the bed is a note which says: ""Sir, payment insufficient for services rendered. My best regards. BS, BURN IMMEDIATELY" which he does. Then he decides to go out and find out how the Black Sheep killed the people. Beran, finds the three bodies on his front door step. When the police arrive he tries to tell them he didn't do it, but.....


Characters:
Beran - a farmer
The Black Sheep

Suggestions:
Interesting take on the story. They say every fairytale and every fable, has some truth to it. It would be interesting how close you might have gotten on this one. Just saying!

Character Count: 1,257 (tags = 173 Characters above this point)
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