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Review by Kit
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Hi Mia - craving colour ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

I really like this poem. It does an excellent job of describing the time before spring.

You use some lovely imagery. Instantly recognisable pictures that make it almost possible to feel the comfort we wrap ourselves in during winter time - the blankets, the hot drinks - whilst we await proper spring, when the sun breaks through, and the trees and plants around us awaken, and the lambs bounce around the fields.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a pleasant rhythm and flow. I like your use of punctuation, as it assists the overall clarity of the piece. And I love that you allow the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the poem. This, in my opinion, perfects the overall clarity and reading experience. Well done!

Suggestions:

I have no real suggestions. I did wonder why, in stanza 1, in the fifth line, spring is written as spring', but it didn't distract me from the rest of the piece. I enjoyed the poem.

My Rating:

This is a lovely poem, that I was very happy to read.

I did have one minor question, but it was just a punctuation mark. So, I will still give this item the 5 out of 5 rating it deserves.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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