Hi Paul D ,I found your writing as part of a challenge. Hopefully this review will find you in good spirit.

I nice story about a woman finding herself in strange situations to find out she no longer lives but is murdered.

I liked the story a lot. The strange phenomenons like the whispering voice, the encounter with the man on the pavement and the train trip al mounted to her coming to the office where no one can see her but apparently they can hear her. Her boss has killed her and they both are taken away into the after life.

What works for me?
Thunder clapped loudly, and lightening flashed across the sky. Heavy rain slashed from the sky in the distance, and I prayed the train would come first. I really didn't want to get wet.

It is this ominous atmosphere I really liked in the story.

Where I have questions?
It's at the end of the story where she finds out she is murdered by her boss. How come, why, how did he do it? Where did it happen. Why was she in her bed this morning like nothing happened? All those questions come to mind, but the most important thing is You don't tell me because the black claws take both Margret and her boss up to the afterlife. I think it's too soon. There is missing this part where he tells her what happened.

Because you didn't write that part I am stuck with the feeling the story is not finished.

All in all a great attempt to a mystery, well written and an easy read.

Keep up the good work, enjoy writing!

WakeUpAndLive