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Review by Cadie Laine
Rated: GC | (3.5)
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Hello, I am reviewing for Game of Thrones. I came across this searching for something to review and wanted something "spicy".
This is a good story. I like the creativity you used to bring the characters together.
Story line:
You have a good story line here, I do wish I had more details on what is going on with the characters. What is more of their backstory? You mentioned she had been working a lot more and he lost his job last year. "He needed to start seeing to her needs..." What has she done for him, aside from work full time possibly two jobs. What about his needs. Once he lost his job the sex just quit? Do they have kids? Are they grown?
At the end of the first paragraph you state "She continued driving home, hoping Ralph would understand." Understand what?
At the end of the paragraph beginning with "Ralph cut the pizza into eight slices..." you wrote: "Nancy started as he touched her." this sentence doesn't make any sense. Started what?
Who said this? "You are ready, aren't you?" It could have been said by either character.
This is a good story. I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't get emotionally involved. There was no emotional connection between the characters. Was there more to their relationship than sex? Sex will help with the relationship but it won't fix things completely, especially if she expects him to admit their marriage is over.
Thank you for writing. Thank you for sharing too. Keep writing.

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