Title of Work: : Color Me Green
Author of Work: : MD Maurice
Date: : July 23

Plot:
"a transplant from Oz does some exploring."

Scene/Setting:
Elphaba, the wicked witch of the west from Oz, ends up in a park, not in Oz. She sees many size creatures running around. One ever spots her and tells her, her costume is "Hot", which although she understands the words, doesn't understand why it was said. She wasn't even warm. And she didn't have on a costume. These were her regular everyday clothes she wore in her tower. She crossed the street and is invited into a house.

A man, dressed in a fireman's gear, with no shirt on, starts talking with her and then draggs her back to a back bedroom. He has sex with her up against the wall of the bedroom. Elphaba, really enjoys it and definitely wants more, as soon as possible. In the end, the man eventually falls to the floor and starts to turn green. He is horrified. Elphaba, just walks out of the room and out of the house, headed down the street.

Characters:
Elphaba - Wicked Witch of the West
Child
Man dressed like a fireman at a house.

Suggestions:
I like the way you have Elphaba, landing on Halloween. It was an interesting beginning also with having Dorothy and Toto killed instead of Elphaba. Good switch up. The idea of the man who had sex with her, turning green was a bit weird, but it worked. I see Elphaba going down the street looking for the next man who can make her feel like she did in the house. This could make a possible future long short story, where you tell about other men she has met and then how she is sent back home. I gather she doesn't have magical red slippers.

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