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Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello, Ghostranch ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


When I was searching your folder, Blue, for poems, this particular one caught my attention as I wanted to know what kind of a poem was written on a blank page. It gave the reader the impression that perhaps it is about writer's block and when the reader got to the short description, her doubts were confirmed. As a fellow writer and poet, I could relate to your poem in more than one ways. I think all of us can. It has happened with me too that I want to write something, I get my pen and my notebook and then sit, trying to think of something to write but it is exactly at that moment when I am blankly staring at the page, wondering what the hell I should write and how all the ideas suddenly left my mind! *Facepalm*

The starting of your poem is very interesting and to the point, the page mocking me as I still hold my pen, wondering when the words will start flowing with the ink and so much time passes and yet there is nothing written. In the end, the page is filled with doodles or random words *Laugh*. I really liked your use of the words 'virgin skin' in the first stanza because that is exactly what we want. The second stanza was fun and had more rhyme, internal rhyme, in it than the first stanza, beautiful! I really liked these two lines the most from your entire poem

My pen’s ready, hand steady, yet still you remain
Untainted, unblemished by the essence of me.

Beautiful! The flow of your poem is good, it flew out smoothly when I read it out and there was no interruption. The rhythm and the flow were enhanced by the presence of the consistent rhyming scheme you used in your poem. Well done!

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