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Review of Broken  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, Lexi ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


When I was responding to the reviews I had received, I had gotten some from you too. I wanted to return the favour. Then we became good friends during GoT and I wanted to read your work, get to know you as a writer and here I am! I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this caught my attention. I like reading sad, emotional poems because of the rawness in them. The short description of your work was even darker and depressing than the title and therefore I wanted to know what and who broke the character in the poem.

You have a very realistic, tragic poem here. When a couple breaks up, they take some time getting over each other, grieving for some time and then take a step to move on in their life. That is what we think happens with all people and we forget that there are some who considered the person their better half, their entire life and when they leave them, they are broken and it's very hard to pick up the pieces and start anew. It's like a journey where they have gotten stuck and cannot move on, same is the case presented here in your poem. The other person has no idea what damage they had done to us but we are the ones suffering, in pain. The poem gave the impression to the reader as if the character in the poem is young and it was probably her first love who she loved deeply and thought that they would be together only to have her dreams shattered. She has nothing to hang onto and she is grabbing frantically on the pieces from the past to make sense of her future but there is no light, no hope, no future for her.

The flow of your poem was very good, there was no interruption and it flew out smoothly when I read it out loud. The vocabulary you had used in your poem was simple but very effective in conveying the emotions to the reader and making her feel the emotions on a personal level. My favourite lines were:

Promises of love,
promises of a new day
turned to ashes.

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