A "Game of Thrones"  Martell Review

Hey! I was searching for something to review for WDC Game of Thrones and I thought of coming to your portfolio to review something! The other day, I reviewed a horror story written by you in Robyn's portfolio so I wanted to read more of your horror stories and here I am. When I was going through your list of stories, the flash fiction caught my eye as I wanted to know where and who was going down and what would they find there.

The flow of your story is good, there wasn't any interruption. The plot is nice, as well as the setting that is perfect for a creepy event to occur, an old farm and an old well that they found just now. I don't know why but in all the horror movies, everyone goes down in the dark, scary places to find what's inside and never come out . I had some suggestions for your work. Feel free to ignore them if you disagree.

==>"metals from rocks and minerals make water look like blood, "Stay focused."
"metals from rocks and minerals make the water look like blood. Stay focused."

==> One showed, a thin stream of water, two were bricked off, and the third was half open and filled with an ominous feel.
One of the paths showed a thin stream of water. Two of them were bricked off and the third was half open and filled with an ominous feel.

==>The drip of water echoed as
The dripping of water echoes as ---

==>The flashlight waved at me in the dark as Ken found something, it was the old man's treasure box, as we opened it, jaws dropping at the contents inside, a sound of rambling bones closed in on us. As we turned I saw Ken's mouth open. His screams were drowned out as blood filled the cracks in the floor.
The flashlight waved at me in the dark as Ken found something. It was the old man's treasure box. As we opened it, their jaws dropped at the contents inside as a sound of rambling bones closed in on us. As we turned I saw Ken's mouth open. His screams were drowned out as blood filled the cracks in the floor.

So what exactly killed them? Were they some kind of treasure protectors?

Thank you for sharing your work with us!
Write On!




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