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Review of Awakening  
Review by Cubby
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings, Teerich - 2019!

My name is Lady Cubbyella and I am one of the sly foxes from the House of Florent. *Fox*

Title: Awakening

First Impression: What a great poetry piece! Wow. I'm super impressed with what you've written here, and it was all inspired by the photograph of the fractured clock with a stairway leading to it, and a girl walking up the steps. Great job!

What needs your attention: I can't even begin to think of what you need to do to improve this. *Shock* It's excellent. If something needs to be changed, I'm not seeing it. *Wink*

What part I liked best: I love how you take "time" and use it to full advantage with words like sharp seconds, moody minutes, blunt hours and so on. I also like the flow of your alliteration... Nice work!

Overall impression: I like how each stanza is a different color, centered, and consistent with no punctuation at all. You've really done well with this. Congratulations on your Honorable Mention!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

Have a great day and...
*Fox*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Fox*


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