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Greetings, victoria31!

My name is Lady Cubbyella and I am one of the sly foxes from the House of Florent. *Fox*

Title: And The Rain Poured

First Impression: This is so very soothing, Victoria! I, too, love to hear the reverberating music beating the metal roof. I'm glad we have a metal roof. *Wink* Why is it so soothing, I wonder? It is though. Perhaps it's the repetitiveness that lulls the soul. Great piece!

What needs your attention: Oh, it's not that big of a deal, but you might want to consider uncapping the beginning of most of your lines. You can get away with that in free-verse, plus it really helps your words to flow nicer. Here's an example in the first stanza:

And the rain poured,
Each drop washing my soul,
Every trickle taking away the [...]


Try this:

And the rain poured,
each drop washing my soul,
every trickle taking away the [...]


What do you think? It's entirely up to you, of course. *Wink*

What part I liked best: I really liked what you said about playing what my soul needs to hear and also the sky sheds its cleansing tears. Beautiful!

Overall impression: It's a feel-good poem! I enjoyed it. We had some rain here yesterday, along with rumbles of thunder and it was HOT! But it was wonderful! *Smile* You've done a really nice job with this.

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

Have a great day and...
*Fox*  K e e p on W r i t i n g ! *Fox*


Cubby ")


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