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Times, They Are A-Changin'  [E]
Church goers ain't what they used to be, but all are welcome. [Rubaiyat]
by Winnie Kay
Review by Kit
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Winnie Kay ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is a sweet poem, dear Winnie. You are right, times are changing!

This poem is about the changes churches are undergoing. There was a time when people would dress up in their finest when attending church. This is no longer a given. People who attend might well show up in torn jeans, or a regular t-shirt, and in an age of cell phones and Pokémon GO, they may not see it as a formal occasion any longer. But you are correct, all are, or should be, welcome. We are all God's children.

On the technical side of things, this poem reads well. It has a lovely rhythm and flow. Pleasant rhyming scheme. I like its presentation, and the slightly larger font - it's easy on the eye. I also like your use of punctuation, as this helps guide the reader and assists the overall clarity of the piece. Great job!

Suggestions:

I have no suggestions about the poem's content. I like it just the way it is. The only thing I'd suggest is allowing the capitalisation at the beginning of each line to depend upon the individual sentences within the piece. This would perfect the overall clarity and reading experience.

My Rating:

A lovely poem that made me smile, thank you!

I did have one suggestion, but that's more of a personal preference. So, I will still give this item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit

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