Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love that you wrote a prologue to the piece. I find introductions help my review process because I have some idea of the author's thoughts. I love the build up of the tension. The first two verses make me feel something is about to happen.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?


Was there a clear purpose to it?

Were these two men strangers, or did they know each other? If they knew each other, I'd like some background into their relationship. If they were strangers I'd like some indication at the conversation to normalize the idea of them going to dinner together.


Glows:

You describe such elation at the kill that you definitely nail what a serial killer or killer who murders for fun might be feeling. I love the methodology you write about. I can feel the killer's thought process when he describes how he executed his plans. I totally dig the line the river rejoices at its gift and flows with new meaning, how sick and twisted is that!!


Grows:

I think main should be man in the 3rd verse.



Miscellaneous Comments:

It's a perfectly creepy piece, the creative process of putting yourself into the mindframe of this killer must have been a change of perspective and you pulled it off so well!


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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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