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Review of Where We End  
Review by Cadie Laine
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello, This is a good poem. The conversation that seems to be there, asking questions of the one who left her, it's thought out well. The rhythm of the poem flowed throughout. The words flow somewhat easily off the tongue. Your word choice enhance the poem.
I did find a couple of places that need some work. In stanza one, line seven. You need to add an 'l' to I'll.
In stanza three, line three, you need a 'u' on you.
Some questions have and maybe they are simply rhetorical questions. This couple dated, then got married, and the husband got into drugs and began separating himself from her. She seems to want to save their marriage, that's great but when does it become too much to handle? When does she realize there is nothing in the marriage to salvage as long as he is on the drugs?
The theme of the poem seems to me, to be don't give up on your marriage and that's awesome. Something we don't see much anymore. When it comes to controlling substances, there has to be a time when someone will say enough is enough and that's it, I'm done, I'm gone. Will she make that decision? Who knows.
Good poem though. Thank you for sharing, Keep writing.

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