Greetings, two of four!

My name is Lady Cubbyella and I am one of the sly foxes from the House of Florent.

Title: The Loving Ones

First Impression: At first I didn't catch on, but then I started to wonder what was up. I think what cinched it was when you referred to the riding place. I thought, "Is it an animal?" but then I quickly brushed that thought away, since Hugh could talk. Anything is possible in fiction though!

What needs your attention: I didn't spot a thing that needed attention!

What part I liked best: I liked that the family was so protective over Hugh, and loving. And accepting. This very well could have been a child, but instead, you make your character a talking dog--a genetic freak, as one of the neighbors say--and the father is a scientist. The light bulb in my head didn't turn on right away when I began reading this. I look back at it now noticing how Hugh calls his family Sister, Brother, Mother, Father, and there aren't any names other than his own. I liked this piece very much, but I liked the way you wrote it even better.

Overall impression: I loved the tone of this story and also that you told it through Hugh's eyes in first person. I enjoy writing in first person, though I'm told a writer is more limited with this POV. But I enjoy reading a story with the narrator in first person, too. I'm not sure why, but it's my favorite POV. Your story flowed along so nicely and captivated me. It's wonderful to read a piece without typos, too. Great job!

Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.

Have a great day and...
  K e e p on W r i t i n g !

Cubby ")

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