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Longing For You  [13+]
I longed for her.
by GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen
Review of Longing For You  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hello, GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I wanted to read more of your work and when I saw the opportunity to review something from your portfolio for WDC Game of Thrones, I couldn't let it slip and here I am! When I was searching for something to read in your poetry folder, this caught my attention. I really like reading sad romantic poems because of how they are so full of raw, painful emotions and the emotions, the feelings get conveyed to the reader perfectly. The title of your poem made the reader feel very sad and sympathetic for the poet and wanted to know more about the person whose love you yearn for.

The flow of your poem is very good, there is no interruption and it flew smoothly when I was reading it out loud. The vocabulary you have used in your poem was simple yet very touching and effective in conveying the emotions, the message, the image to the reader. You have a very emotional poem here, Gervic, it touched me greatly. It made the reader feel very sad for a couple who didn't get along well and ended. It was especially painful for the poet who believed every word she said, loved her with his entire heart and yet she didn't love him the same way he did. My favourite stanza was the second last and the last one, they really touched me as I loved your use of strong vocabulary and minutes turned to hours and hours to days and then days to nights, very unique and very strong!

I was wondering if this was a typo: ""'Till death do as part." " I thought it should be "till death do us part"? Or did you use it intentionally?

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