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Come To Me  [13+]
What if you are in love with someone, but that someone doesn't love you back?
by GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen
Review of Come To Me  
Review by ~ Aqua ~
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hello, GERVIC 🐉 House Targaryen ! I am Aqua and the following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your item.


I was searching for something to review from your portfolio when this caught my attention and made me recall the previous poem I had read in your portfolio with the title "Longing for You" and you had written that poem very well that I automatically wanted to know what this poem was about and how you had written it. The title of your poem was very effective in grabbing the reader's attention as she feels sadness as well as a strong desire to call the person she loves to her. The short description of your work was even more sad as I imagined how it must feel to love someone and not have them love you back.

The short description also reminded me of Ghazals in Urdu Literature that I read in my college where many of the poems have the theme similar to yours that the poet wants his lover to look his way, give him the love he wants and yet despite his efforts, everything is in vain and nothing is successful. The beginning of your poem sounded just like a sad, love song to the reader. The rhythm was very good and so was the flow as there was no interruption there. It made the reader want to cry to read such painful poem of how you love her, how you long for her and yet you cannot win her heart. The last stanza was my favourite especially this line, I really loved it! To love a person who was once like me,
Who had nothing, but a poor heart anyway.

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