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Review by Cadie Laine
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Hello, I am reviewing for Game of Thrones that is going on through WDC.
This is a very interesting story. A young man has the gift of sight and is made judge in this community/country. He begins to have nightmares that show him who he could be or has been in the past, not sure which. He is looking for clues to figure out what to do with The information he's been given. In the process, he thinks he's found the woman who holds the baby that will house his next soul. The kicker is he still thinks he's going to be a bad buy but in reality he becomes a judge again.
So the point of the story is that in all of us there is a choice we all have to make. In that choice we decide whether or not to be good or bad. Our choices have consequences and others will live out those consequences if we are not careful with our own lives.
This story was easy to read and moved along quick enough. It was not really my type of story being that I enjoy romance. I like this one. It made me think and I enjoy it when a story helps me to see things in a new perspective.
A recommendation is in the first line you wrote: "Oh my God, that looks like a courier. The Judge's know!" I would recommend changing Judge's to Judges. With the apostrophe the word 'is' is tacked on afterward. so it reads "The Judge is know." That doesn't make sense. It took me a few times reading to catch what I thought you had actually said.
I like your story. Thank you for sharing, keep writing.
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