Hi Cinn ,

A "Game of Thrones"  House Martell Review!

First impression:

An honest poem on being an atheist. It's refreshing to see someone who is not afraid to admit to their beliefs, or lack thereof. There are so many poems about people "who find God" or are "born again", but there are not many poems about not believing in God.

Form:

Ooh, a metered poem - have I fallen down Alice's rabbit hole? You have four stanzas of perfect ballad meter in quatrains of ABCB rhyme scheme.

You have included a number of poetic devices in your poem, but I love the heavy use of enjambment.

General impressions:

It is easy to feel the emotions coming off this poem. There is nothing worse than a friend who cannot accept you for who you are. You have obviously been left very hurt by this ex-friend who probably only saw someone who needed saving or converting.

Your poem reads like you are having to defend your beliefs to this person who should have accepted you for you, which is really sad.

In many ways, friends have the ability to hurt us more deeply than our own family can. We can't choose our family, but we can choose our friends. The hurt caused by someone we chose to let into our lives can stay with us for a long time.

Favourite quotes:


Your opening two lines set the whole tone for your poem. It can be easy to overlook what this poem is really about. It's about the pain and hurt of knowing that someone thought of as a friend wasn't really a friend.



These lines reinforce your underlying message. Friendship is about accepting someone for who they are, faults and all. You are who you are, and why should you have to change for someone else?

Thank you for sharing your work with us! Write On!


Lord Andy~Sunspear of Martell




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .